Feed back on WIP art pls
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Hi all, I am new to RoyalRoad, and I just started to upload my first novel (http://royalroadl.com/fiction/8909) and I decided to make some cover art, it shows the two main Chars Ari(Ariana Duenas) and her lover/partner Blain (BL89E a Bio Organic Android) I was looking for some feedback as to what you all thought of it so far, keep in mind this is still a wip please.
Thanks,
Terminus Est.
Original drawing
WIP 1
Cover(possibly)
Thanks,
Terminus Est.
Original drawing
WIP 1
Cover(possibly)
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Looks good so far, but if i were drawing I'd finish off this one and consider it a draft, then redraw, working on smoothing out the curves and proportions where it feels off. It helps to use some light pencil marks as guides.
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RE: Feed back on WIP art pls
#3'j0nn0' pid='817228' dateline='1477517062' Wrote: Looks good so far, but if i were drawing I'd finish off this one and consider it a draft, then redraw, working on smoothing out the curves and proportions where it feels off. It helps to use some light pencil marks as guides.
This is the rough, after I am done with it I scan it in and do a digital version based on this one. thanks for the feed back!
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Here it is after some clean up and colors
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The colors on the guys pants should blend more closely if you are looking to make it camouflage but if you don't then it's fine.
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#6'RyotiRyan' pid='817286' dateline='1477657015' Wrote: The colors on the guys pants should blend more closely if you are looking to make it camouflage but if you don't then it's fine.
So then should I loose the black outline for the colors on his pants? or do you mean he needs more patterns on them?
RE: Feed back on WIP art pls
#7'TerminusEst' pid='817290' dateline='1477665426' Wrote:'RyotiRyan' pid='817286' dateline='1477657015' Wrote: The colors on the guys pants should blend more closely if you are looking to make it camouflage but if you don't then it's fine.
So then should I loose the black outline for the colors on his pants? or do you mean he needs more patterns on them?
I mean it should look more like this:
and not look as blocky and spaced out as yours do.
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I think a big problem here is a similar colour palette between the two, since they're standing back to back and they're both in all greys. Perhaps doing some shadow on the big guy's back, cast by the smaller woman, would help distinguish the two as separate people.
I'm not really an artist though, and I'm not completely sure with the direction of lighting you're trying to go with, so take my advice as a suggestion rather than a command.
I'm not really an artist though, and I'm not completely sure with the direction of lighting you're trying to go with, so take my advice as a suggestion rather than a command.
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#9'bubbleduck' pid='817594' dateline='1478057596' Wrote: I think a big problem here is a similar colour palette between the two, since they're standing back to back and they're both in all greys. Perhaps doing some shadow on the big guy's back, cast by the smaller woman, would help distinguish the two as separate people.Hmm, that's a good idea...
I'm not really an artist though, and I'm not completely sure with the direction of lighting you're trying to go with, so take my advice as a suggestion rather than a command.
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Giving a list:
Lines too rough and pixilated.
Waist of both characters way too big, mostly guy
Left leg on guy is fat
Shading on metal is bad, use a soft brush to smooth then highlight with a thin one.
Guys arm holding gun is fine but gets fat past wrist, thumb too big
Left pocket looks likes its falling off trousers
Skin color is bad, too yellow/green try for pinky orange
Trousers don't look like fabric, hard to do. Forgiven.
Girls right leg hangs off body
Head too big on guy
Just some, can offer techniques to improve. Pm.
Use bluish gray instead of full gray, better effect.
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Lines too rough and pixilated.
Waist of both characters way too big, mostly guy
Left leg on guy is fat
Shading on metal is bad, use a soft brush to smooth then highlight with a thin one.
Guys arm holding gun is fine but gets fat past wrist, thumb too big
Left pocket looks likes its falling off trousers
Skin color is bad, too yellow/green try for pinky orange
Trousers don't look like fabric, hard to do. Forgiven.
Girls right leg hangs off body
Head too big on guy
Just some, can offer techniques to improve. Pm.
Use bluish gray instead of full gray, better effect.
You asked for feedback ,_,
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