Review Exchange!

#1
I'm looking to exchange reviews with anyone who has a moderately short fiction. Mine is 5659 words divided into four chapters (as of this post). I don't mind what your fiction is about. If you're interested, leave a reply or personal message me with a link to your fiction. Here's my web serial's synopsis and link. 

Gamer Girl is a superhero action comedy web serial following the bizarre adventures of Ralphie Hero, aka Gamer Girl, a costumed vigilante with the superpower to summon the items and abilities of video game player characters. Working alongside her partner Comikazé ‘Kazé’ Maniakku, aka Fangirl, a superhero fanatic with an electric fan gun, Ralphie sets out to make a name for herself in a city already full of crime fighters. Between the monsters, the supervillains, and Ralphie’s mild sociopathic tendencies, it does not go well.

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9029
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#2
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='817976' dateline='1478791350' Wrote: I'm looking to exchange reviews with anyone who has a moderately short fiction. Mine is 5659 words divided into four chapters (as of this post). I don't mind what your fiction is about. If you're interested, leave a reply or personal message me with a link to your fiction. Here's my web serial's synopsis and link. 

Gamer Girl is a superhero action comedy web serial following the bizarre adventures of Ralphie Hero, aka Gamer Girl, a costumed vigilante with the superpower to summon the abilities and items of video game player characters. Working alongside her partner Comikazé ‘Kazé’ Maniakku, aka Fangirl, a superhero fanatic with an electric fan gun, Ralphie sets out to make a name for herself in a city already full of crime fighters. Between the monsters, the supervillains, and Ralphie’s mild sociopathic tendencies, it does not go well.

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9029

No problem. I'd love to trade reviews/comments.

The Knights of 'Z'

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#3
'Mike Eadie' pid='817989' dateline='1478806201' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='817976' dateline='1478791350' Wrote: I'm looking to exchange reviews with anyone who has a moderately short fiction. Mine is 5659 words divided into four chapters (as of this post). I don't mind what your fiction is about. If you're interested, leave a reply or personal message me with a link to your fiction. Here's my web serial's synopsis and link. 

Gamer Girl is a superhero action comedy web serial following the bizarre adventures of Ralphie Hero, aka Gamer Girl, a costumed vigilante with the superpower to summon the abilities and items of video game player characters. Working alongside her partner Comikazé ‘Kazé’ Maniakku, aka Fangirl, a superhero fanatic with an electric fan gun, Ralphie sets out to make a name for herself in a city already full of crime fighters. Between the monsters, the supervillains, and Ralphie’s mild sociopathic tendencies, it does not go well.

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9029

No problem. I'd love to trade reviews/comments.

The Knights of 'Z'

A superhero fiction like mine? Great! I'll review it first thing tomorrow.
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#4
'Mike Eadie' pid='817989' dateline='1478806201' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='817976' dateline='1478791350' Wrote: I'm looking to exchange reviews with anyone who has a moderately short fiction. Mine is 5659 words divided into four chapters (as of this post). I don't mind what your fiction is about. If you're interested, leave a reply or personal message me with a link to your fiction. Here's my web serial's synopsis and link. 

Gamer Girl is a superhero action comedy web serial following the bizarre adventures of Ralphie Hero, aka Gamer Girl, a costumed vigilante with the superpower to summon the abilities and items of video game player characters. Working alongside her partner Comikazé ‘Kazé’ Maniakku, aka Fangirl, a superhero fanatic with an electric fan gun, Ralphie sets out to make a name for herself in a city already full of crime fighters. Between the monsters, the supervillains, and Ralphie’s mild sociopathic tendencies, it does not go well.

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9029

No problem. I'd love to trade reviews/comments.

The Knights of 'Z'

Hi, I reviewed The Knights of 'Z'. I'd like to follow it; how do you do that?
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#5
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818023' dateline='1478874821' Wrote: Hi, I reviewed The Knights of 'Z'. I'd like to follow it; how do you do that?

I believe it's the "Add to your bookshelf" on the right-hand side of the fiction's main page.
Looking for stuff to read? Click below to navigate to my stories.

https://i.imgur.com/r6iTizF.jpg

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#6
'Luciferia' pid='818038' dateline='1478915273' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818023' dateline='1478874821' Wrote: Hi, I reviewed The Knights of 'Z'. I'd like to follow it; how do you do that?

I believe it's the "Add to your bookshelf" on the right-hand side of the fiction's main page.

Thanks, Luciferia.
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#9
'TerminusEst' pid='818318' dateline='1479487176' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818225' dateline='1479309470' Wrote: Still interested in exchanging reviews as of this post.

I'm up for a review swap my book is sitting at 17,000 ish words and 11 chaps its sci fi 
Here's the link:
https://royalroadl.com/fiction/8909

Huh, 17000 words. I was looking for something shorter. How about I review the first five chapters of A.I. Artificial Intelligence and you review the five chapters there are of Gamer Girl. Deal?
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#10
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818335' dateline='1479569265' Wrote:
'TerminusEst' pid='818318' dateline='1479487176' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818225' dateline='1479309470' Wrote: Still interested in exchanging reviews as of this post.

I'm up for a review swap my book is sitting at 17,000 ish words and 11 chaps its sci fi 
Here's the link:
https://royalroadl.com/fiction/8909

Huh, 17000 words. I was looking for something shorter. How about I review the first five chapters of A.I. Artificial Intelligence and you review the five chapters there are of Gamer Girl. Deal?
you can read however much you want lol im not forcing you to read it all lol ill be sure to read and review yours today hehe  :)

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#11
'TerminusEst' pid='818336' dateline='1479570922' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818335' dateline='1479569265' Wrote:
'TerminusEst' pid='818318' dateline='1479487176' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818225' dateline='1479309470' Wrote: Still interested in exchanging reviews as of this post.

I'm up for a review swap my book is sitting at 17,000 ish words and 11 chaps its sci fi 
Here's the link:
https://royalroadl.com/fiction/8909

Huh, 17000 words. I was looking for something shorter. How about I review the first five chapters of A.I. Artificial Intelligence and you review the five chapters there are of Gamer Girl. Deal?
you can read however much you want lol im not forcing you to read it all lol ill be sure to read and review yours today hehe  :)

Great. I'll review yours first thing tomorrow.
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#12
'TerminusEst' pid='818336' dateline='1479570922' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818335' dateline='1479569265' Wrote:
'TerminusEst' pid='818318' dateline='1479487176' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818225' dateline='1479309470' Wrote: Still interested in exchanging reviews as of this post.

I'm up for a review swap my book is sitting at 17,000 ish words and 11 chaps its sci fi 
Here's the link:
https://royalroadl.com/fiction/8909

Huh, 17000 words. I was looking for something shorter. How about I review the first five chapters of A.I. Artificial Intelligence and you review the five chapters there are of Gamer Girl. Deal?
you can read however much you want lol im not forcing you to read it all lol ill be sure to read and review yours today hehe  :)

Hey, Terminus. I reviewed your fiction. I also followed and favourited it.
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#13
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818372' dateline='1479654887' Wrote:
'TerminusEst' pid='818336' dateline='1479570922' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818335' dateline='1479569265' Wrote:
'TerminusEst' pid='818318' dateline='1479487176' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818225' dateline='1479309470' Wrote: Still interested in exchanging reviews as of this post.

I'm up for a review swap my book is sitting at 17,000 ish words and 11 chaps its sci fi 
Here's the link:
https://royalroadl.com/fiction/8909

Huh, 17000 words. I was looking for something shorter. How about I review the first five chapters of A.I. Artificial Intelligence and you review the five chapters there are of Gamer Girl. Deal?
you can read however much you want lol im not forcing you to read it all lol ill be sure to read and review yours today hehe  :)

Hey, Terminus. I reviewed your fiction. I also followed and favourited it.
Sorry about the wait, just finished the review on yours! hope it helps, I really like the concept and setting of it!


lol thats funny, just read through the review you thought I had to much exposition, and I thought you didn't explain enough.

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#15
'PotatoSenpai' pid='818498' dateline='1479877930' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='817976' dateline='1478791350' Wrote: I'm looking to exchange reviews with anyone who has a moderately short fiction. Mine is 5659 words divided into four chapters (as of this post). I don't mind what your fiction is about. If you're interested, leave a reply or personal message me with a link to your fiction. Here's my web serial's synopsis and link. 

Gamer Girl is a superhero action comedy web serial following the bizarre adventures of Ralphie Hero, aka Gamer Girl, a costumed vigilante with the superpower to summon the abilities and items of video game player characters. Working alongside her partner Comikazé ‘Kazé’ Maniakku, aka Fangirl, a superhero fanatic with an electric fan gun, Ralphie sets out to make a name for herself in a city already full of crime fighters. Between the monsters, the supervillains, and Ralphie’s mild sociopathic tendencies, it does not go well.

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9029

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9235
I'd love to exchange reviews with you! I'm new to writing light novels but have read lots of them, so I hope i'll be able to provide useful feedback for you. Thanks!

Okay. I'll review yours right now.
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#17
'PotatoSenpai' pid='818506' dateline='1479906892' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818505' dateline='1479900086' Wrote:
'PotatoSenpai' pid='818498' dateline='1479877930' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='817976' dateline='1478791350' Wrote: I'm looking to exchange reviews with anyone who has a moderately short fiction. Mine is 5659 words divided into four chapters (as of this post). I don't mind what your fiction is about. If you're interested, leave a reply or personal message me with a link to your fiction. Here's my web serial's synopsis and link. 

Gamer Girl is a superhero action comedy web serial following the bizarre adventures of Ralphie Hero, aka Gamer Girl, a costumed vigilante with the superpower to summon the abilities and items of video game player characters. Working alongside her partner Comikazé ‘Kazé’ Maniakku, aka Fangirl, a superhero fanatic with an electric fan gun, Ralphie sets out to make a name for herself in a city already full of crime fighters. Between the monsters, the supervillains, and Ralphie’s mild sociopathic tendencies, it does not go well.

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9029

http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9235
I'd love to exchange reviews with you! I'm new to writing light novels but have read lots of them, so I hope i'll be able to provide useful feedback for you. Thanks!

Okay. I'll review yours right now.

Thanks man. I'll read up on yours right now, and finish the review by tomorrow latest. Once again, thank you for your feedback!

I finished my review of the first two chapters of your story. I favourited and followed Dance of the Phaegon too.
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)

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#19
'PotatoSenpai' pid='818526' dateline='1479949788' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818509' dateline='1479910924' Wrote:
'PotatoSenpai' pid='818506' dateline='1479906892' Wrote:
'Joe Berridge Beale' pid='818505' dateline='1479900086' Wrote:
'PotatoSenpai' pid='818498' dateline='1479877930' Wrote: http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9235
I'd love to exchange reviews with you! I'm new to writing light novels but have read lots of them, so I hope i'll be able to provide useful feedback for you. Thanks!

Okay. I'll review yours right now.

Thanks man. I'll read up on yours right now, and finish the review by tomorrow latest. Once again, thank you for your feedback!

I finished my review of the first two chapters of your story. I favourited and followed Dance of the Phaegon too.

I've finished reviewing Gamer Girl as well, I've followed and favourite it, and will be looking forward to future chapters. Thanks for your advice too, I'll try to work on the points that you have mentioned in your review.

Thanks, Potato. In regards to your point about Kazé's hair and eye colour, when she first meets Ralphie she's described as 'raven-haired', and after they do their intro routine later on, she's outlined as having 'big black Japanese eyes'. Also, I forgot to mention it in your review, but halberds don't have scabbards: scabbards are the sheathes you put the blades of swords or knives in.   
Gamer Girl (A superhero action comedy web serial about a superheroine who can summon items and abilities from video games.)