Multiple Personalities

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Hello I'm Brenner and this is Teage, Matt, John, and Elizabeth. We all share the same body unfortunately. I'm the one in charge, but I have to listen to them all the time. We get along for the most part and I've lived this way for a long time. Then a new game came out called Soul Quest Online. When we started to play it though we all were separate people, and were thrust headfirst into something bigger then we could have imagined.

This is one of my first stories and I'd like some feedback to my work if you get the chance to read it.