Hey guys!
I started writing a story (link below) and I'm trying to make it as realistic as possible. So far the reviews and comments - which have been helpful - haven't been as in-depth as I would like. If anyone would be willing to look at it I would appreciate it. Any honest comment/review is great but I'm specifically looking for help with the character's decision making. Thanks for any help in advance!

Mature story link: https://royalroadl.com/fiction/12090/judgement