Hi there! I've created an original English light novel. It follows Jacob Harroway as he fights off would be assasin after he gains a mysterious power. Despite Jacob being the main character, the novel will switch perspectives. The action will be more about strategy than actual fighting due to the nature of the power. Most of the comedy will come through witty dialogue and banter. There should be illustrations everybody few chapters. There is also profanity in the story but mostly used for comedy sake.

This is my first story I'm posting online so I'd like some criticism and feedback to help improve my writing 

https://royalroadl.com/fiction/12581/sorry-those-powers-wont-fix-your-problems/chapter/143757/where-the-story-begins