hallo, I have recently made a web novel, of which you (yes you, why else would you look at this shit?) can review so you can make a conclusion on how to improve my fiction since I can be a bit thick when it comes to seeing the flaws in my work.

I want to know where i am falling behind or doing bad since my incredibly low standards can't tell what is good and what is bad although I know that i suck as much as a dyson ball multi floor 2 upright vacuum.


my fiction

thread on promote your fiction

in terms of story, i will spoil it to you because i am so evil (muhahahahahaha). the MC is a dude who is very nice until his wife and newborn son are eaten by trolls, at which point he becomes dark and depressed, so he wanders around the world for a purpose and because he has nothing left to live for.