Hello there friendly traveler of the forum, can you please stop by to let me know if the story is working as I pictured it prior to writing?

Since there has been no initial feedback so far I'm afraid to continue forward without getting a sense if the style works as intended.

Thank you so much for your precious time!

https://royalroadl.com/fiction/15912/duality-of-a-soul

It is an ambitious story that will hopefully include all the different mythologies and geographies of the world into play.