Private Review for my Fiction

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Hi,

I have written a first chapter for a story I'm eventually hoping to write on this site.

The story idea is about a full fantasy world where the main character is a species of mouse. It has a bit of survivalist story telling later on in the fiction, but I wanted to create a story where you feel rooted in the main character's feet, understand his perspective and grow more grounded in the fiction as it grows.


I'm looking for private reviews, as I am not confident enough to post directly on to this thread. I may post my later drafts on the thread later, for public viewing.

If you would like to review my fiction, please notify me below. I will private message you my draft.

(feel free to be as nitpicky as you like!)

- ClickPause