Looking for feedback
#1
Hello, I have posted an edited writing sample on RR and am currently looking for feedback.
http://www.royalroadl.com/fiction/16908/neomegalith
It is a hard scifi pulp in the vein of John Carter of Mars. Constructive criticism is welcome.
http://www.royalroadl.com/fiction/16908/neomegalith
It is a hard scifi pulp in the vein of John Carter of Mars. Constructive criticism is welcome.
RE: Looking for feedback
#2
Heya,
I generally don't read that much scifi, save for star wars, but I really like the sample you put out. It reminds me a bit of the story lines of the old point and click puzzle games. The mystery of how humanity became a race of ancients is dragging me in.
There is the occasional typo and a grammar mistake here and there (one segment in the first chapter with odd tenses) but overall the grammar is good.
The story feels like you, the author, knows where it is going, which is a good thing. If you kept writing, I would keep reading. I like that is different from most things you encounter on this site.
That's all for now, cheers,
-Verus
I generally don't read that much scifi, save for star wars, but I really like the sample you put out. It reminds me a bit of the story lines of the old point and click puzzle games. The mystery of how humanity became a race of ancients is dragging me in.
There is the occasional typo and a grammar mistake here and there (one segment in the first chapter with odd tenses) but overall the grammar is good.
The story feels like you, the author, knows where it is going, which is a good thing. If you kept writing, I would keep reading. I like that is different from most things you encounter on this site.
That's all for now, cheers,
-Verus